Havoc's kid! gimme my cookie! it's karra! alternate universe Karra but Karra nonetheless! i fine it looks pretty good.. though if you want to make it better... cleaner lines? more shape and dimention in the water.. when water moves quickly white water forms in some places andit'll splash a bit so some drops here and there could be good and i think her right arm is too long... uhh that's all i can suggest.... enjoy and nice pic

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<sub>This looks very good.

Is her Daddy Havok?

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Thankies I still think it needs work in some places though.

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It was just a tryout, I'm probably gonna draw it on paper before actually CGing a real version of it. Thanks for the advice on the water (I had NO idea what to do for that) I'll see what I can do about fixing the arm too (what part looks off?)

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The first think I noticed is the inconsistency of the raised arm in relation to the shoulder. Without sounding like a perv, when one arm is raise like that, one breast should actually be a little higher than the oher. Raise your arm and look down at your chest. Even with guys there;s a noticable raise in one side of the chest. The midsection is fine from what I can tell. The shoulders could be a little wider. Also, try using yoru own hands for reference of size. I do that all the time ^^ As far as coloring. dA has an incredible tutorial section that could help you with the lines, so that the colors stand out like they're supposed to. The lines distract because of the sketchiness. ^^ I hope that helped you!

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the arm's length it looks too long.. use the other arm's sections to help with the length.... lol length! XD

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You've got a point there. I'll keep that in mind when I draw the finished version. My characters shoulders are always a bit small so I'll keep that in mind when I make the finished version. So I guess her hands are a bit small? Kay, I'll take that into consideration too. It's all sketchy because it's just a test picture. Guaranteed the lines on the finished picture will be alot nicer.

Thank you so much for the feedback ^^ It really helped!

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well first off, there is little sense of movement, which doesn't quite suit the raised arm and the blue...stuff...I'm guessing water? Anyhow, your lineart is a lot more sketchy than usual, and the arm raised above her head is very...long. But yea. I do like your choice of coloring for behind the...water..?

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